A last request

Standing on the gallows
under distant skies of grey
soon I knock on Heaven's door
but you can now walk away

Though my neck is in the noose
on this my judgement day
I look to your passing Grace
please go on and walk away

I pause in this short silence
as you take the time to pray
listen to my last request
forget me and walk away

As I near this my end
I view life in mind's display
your only choice to take here
is to turn and walk away

There is only one ending
for the last act of this play
heed my words before I go
I beg you to walk a---

Posted at Poets and Storytellers United, Weekly Scribblings #40: Walking Away

24 comments:

  1. A classic 'walking away' scenario, Joel, in a well-written ballad form.

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  2. I like the story-like aspect of this piece. It makes me wonder about the life that was led up to this moment and the life able to walk away at this moment. Will she (because I love how Grace can mean a couple things here) be able to completely walk away? I suspect something will always be left behind.

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    1. I'm glad this brought out these thoughts, Rommy. Thank you for sharing. There may be something more here and maybe I can incorporate this into a larger piece I'm working on. Hmmm.

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  3. waaaaay cool. Well done, Joel.

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  4. Oh yes, what Kim said. It sounds like one of those mournful cowboy/gunslinger ballads I used to listen to when I was growing up! (I never really lost my taste for them.)

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    1. I'm glad this drew out some of these thoughts. It could be from a repressed sad cowboy song, who knows?
      Thanks for sharing, Rosemary.

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  5. I like how Grace can be taken as several things, which makes the last request different depending on who the reader sees Grace to be. I know you know, but still!

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    1. Thank you, Lisa. Each reader is taking a slightly different interpretation and that's a wonderful thing.

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  6. Read like a lament as well as a prayer
    Nice one Joel

    Much💖love

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  7. I agree with Rosemary. It needs to be put to music. I truly enjoy your poems, Joel.

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    1. If you can set the chords, we can split the royalties. Ha!
      Thank you, Rosemary. That's a wonderful thought.

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  8. What a beautiful and touching poem this is.

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  9. I enjoyed reading your poem and now of course I am really wanting the backstory.

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    1. Thank you, Helen. I'm going to have to get to work, then.

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  10. I began early in the year "walking away." There were far too many in my people baggage I needed to unpack. It has been hard, but I feel so much better for it.

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    1. Each of us have a journey and sometimes we must be on the path alone. I wish you luck on your path.
      Thanks, Suzie.

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  11. This is brilliant. A dying person's plea to walk away before the end. And as a reader I was roped in, I didn't walk away in time, because I saw the end.

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    1. Thank you, Lori. A little pun thrown in is appreciated as well.

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  12. Brilliant, Joel! Hard to walk away, even when asked.

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