Sleet began to fallA dream that was relayed to me from My One and I must say she has some interesting ones. I diverged from my path of posting positive words in order to pass this along.
still mixed with rain
dark barely eased by the streetlights above.
Her threadbare coat
nearly soaked through
the chill reaching in to her bones.
The bench near the pines
out of the wind
the only shelter from the coming storm.
They sat together
husband and wife
this bench their rest for the night.
The shelters were full
the underpass
not a welcoming place for them tonight.
Their home long ago
taken for owed
taxes and sold to the highest bidder.
They sat on that bench
in those shadows
the cold and wet chilling to the bone.
He gave up his coat
to her, his love
then a tarp to keep under from the rain.
The temperature dropped
and darkness grew
she fell into a dream-full sleep.
They walked together
her hand in his
on the warm beach thirty years ago.
In each others arms
she in her peace
as he drifted into his new beginning.
Forever parted now
could she go on
as she dreams for the morning grace?
Posted at Poets and Storytellers United: Writers’ Pantry #26: “You can make anything by writing”
A poignant dream, tenderly told.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Rosemary. I appreciate your thoughts.
DeleteLuckily it was only a dream, but it was a reminder that things to not stay the way they are almost always going to change and we just have to accept that.
ReplyDeleteIt's a reality for some people but I'm glad this was just a dream. That is a good reminder that life can change at any moment. Thanks. Robin
DeleteThat’s quite unusual, Joel, writing about someone else’s dream. I love the way you set the scene with the sleet and streetlights – I felt the chill – and the solitary bench. I also like the way you revealed the couple’s plight in so few words – a terrible thing to happen. These lines are so touching:
ReplyDelete'He gave up his coat
to her, his love
then a tarp to keep under from the rain.'
This was the first time that I created the narrative from my wife's dreams and I may try this again. I'm glad you liked this, Kim and I appreciate your kind feedback.
DeleteSad but beautifully poignant
ReplyDeleteThank you, Anthony. I appreciate your thoughts.
Deleteawesome; awful; I'm awe-filled.
ReplyDeleteThank you for the kind words, Ron.
DeleteTotally not hugging a dog and tearing up. Really. Beautifully done.
ReplyDeleteReally.
DeleteYour reactions seem to the consensus. I'm glad you liked this even though it made your cry. Thank you, Chrissa.
DeleteWhat a heart-tugging tale! I admire your ability to bring someone else's dream to such visual clarity. I will think of it when I drive by the cardboard palaces beneath the highway overpass.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Beverly. I appreciate your kind thoughts. We never know how someone's circumstances are that lead them into homelessness. It shouldn't be the end for anyone.
DeleteJust like C. Sandlin, above, I'm totally not pressing my hand to my chest or trying to ease up the lump that seems to be growing in my throat. This is heartbreaking and bittersweet. I am so glad they had such a connection, and that the pain could be shared.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Magaly. I'm glad I reached your heart and I appreciate your kind feedback.
DeleteThis is beautifully evocative! I can picture this so clearly; "They sat on that bench in those shadows the cold and wet chilling to the bone. He gave up his coat to her, his love."💝
ReplyDeleteThank you, Sanaa. I'm so glad you liked this and shared your thoughts.
DeleteThis is so vividly related, sometimes empathy takes over to manifest in dreamscape
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That's an interesting thought, Magaly. Thank you.
DeleteWow great poem. Very poignant You got me into tears now
ReplyDeleteHard to think that this is a sad reality for some
It is sad reality for some. I'm glad that I could touch your heart, Marja. Thank you for your kind words.
Deletethis was so beautiful. reminded me of Joseph and Mary. great read.
ReplyDeleteThose are kind words and an example of how each of us interpret a story in our own way. Thank you, Humblekind.
DeleteSad but so beautiful...It speaks profoundly of love
ReplyDeleteThank you, Susie. Your thoughts are appreciated and I'm glad you liked this.
DeleteThis is very poignant, sad but what love!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Jenna. I appreciate your kind words. I'm glad you liked this.
DeleteThis is sadly the new truth post lockdown of the economy for so many... very disturbing.
ReplyDeleteHappy Wednesday Joel
ReplyDeleteMuch💖love
It's happened before and will happen again, before people figure out that taxing-and-spending don't help poor people.
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